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Zombi

W:O:A Metalmaster
10 Jan. 2002
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Wow... that's... that's pretty bad...

..I mean...at least spell check it or write in your own tongue.

I don't mean to be cruel, but seriously...wow..
 

Zombi

W:O:A Metalmaster
10 Jan. 2002
11.260
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Edinburgh, Scotland
Ok, I was a little harsh, but you know if you're going to publish your works online you gotta accept some "people" will say it's shit.

So here's some constructive critisism.

Spelling. Seriously, there simply should not be spelling errors. There's really no excuse. Get a dictionary or spell checker.

Grammar/Structure. Poetry is not just about describing things, it's also about the manipulation of language to create art. Your work lacks this, is it even poetry? it just sounds like Amon Amarth, only there's no kick ass riffs. Hence my suggestion to perhaps write in your mother tongue. Make it sound like song even when you read it.

Your blog. The colours are a bit harsh and white against blue doesn't come across as great for reading.
 

dittohead

W:O:A Metalmaster
4 Feb. 2003
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Ok, I was a little harsh, but you know if you're going to publish your works online you gotta accept some "people" will say it's shit.

So here's some constructive critisism.

Spelling. Seriously, there simply should not be spelling errors. There's really no excuse. Get a dictionary or spell checker.

Grammar/Structure. Poetry is not just about describing things, it's also about the manipulation of language to create art. Your work lacks this, is it even poetry? it just sounds like Amon Amarth, only there's no kick ass riffs. Hence my suggestion to perhaps write in your mother tongue. Make it sound like song even when you read it.

Your blog. The colours are a bit harsh and white against blue doesn't come across as great for reading.

you've gone soft.. :mad: